Way back

This is a story for Friday Fictioneers, which is hosted by Rochelle. Every week you are challenged to write a 100 word story based on a photo.

Thanks to Björn Rudberg for this week’s photo and also to Rochelle for hosting the challenge.

Thanks to all the readers for their time, too.

PHOTO PROMPT © Björn Rudberg

STOP! They stopped at the sign. They were surprised that they had come so far.

Silence, peace and just the two — it could be their favourite spot. However, between them ran some space and the gentle breeze touched them. Silence presided, until she said, “… that’s it… then.”

“Huh…I guess so,” he said.

The birds were flying, what seemed like to their nests. From the sky, a cooler sun was descending into the valley somewhere.

They hugged but in the absence of any warmth.

She drove past him and the signpost — STOP!

At home, her family would be waiting for her.

20 thoughts on “Way back

  1. Dear Norma
    You’ve dome some good mood painting in this story.
    You’ve suffused it with a sense of nostalgia. The couple are plainly parting. With the photoprompt in front of me, I fear that she goes over the cliff – but that doesn’t seem justified by the story. Part of the problem is your last line. We don’t know whether her family are waiting and will be disappointed when she doesn’t return, or whether she’s going home to rejoin her family after a relationship hasn’t worked out.
    With a bit more clarity this would be an excellent story, I think.


    • Thanks Penny for your detailed feedback.
      She is just going back home where she is needed more. But of course, anything can happen and there could be another story.


  2. i like the way you describe the birds returning to their nest and the implied coolness ahead. As Joyce Grenfell said, “Parting is hell”. Even if you don’t get along with someone it’s still a very sad thing. And at least Joyce did add “But sing as well!”


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